The only way to ensure road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree?

The only way to keep traffic
safety
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is to give more punishments
on
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for
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driving offences. I totally agree with
this
statement. The main reason traffic
become
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dangerous is
people
drive
speedly
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speedily
speed
the car. If police officers pay more attention and give more punishments, the traffic will be safe and accidents will not happen.
Firstly
, the government should accept limits
of
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speed.
Then
police
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the police
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should punish
them
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those
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, who do not obey the rules.
For instance
, in our
country
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electronic devices called radar
take
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car's
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car
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photos that do not obey the speed limit. After that, the
people
who
drive
speedly
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speedily
pay money.
Secondly
, If
people
drive
without
licence
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a licence
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,
government
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the government
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should reduce to
drive
for
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of
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them.
People
who do not have
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a licence
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licence
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licences
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can cause accidents. To avoid
that situations
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that situation
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, police should punish driving offences. In conclusion,
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