Many people think that food companies should not be allowed to advertise, while others believe that all companies should have the right to advertise. What is your opinion?

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business is immensely
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popular
between
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businessmen. While
propoents
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proponents
hold the view of
porhibit
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prohibit
publishing any kind of
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advertisements
adverterisements
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advertisements
,
oponents
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opponents
hold a diverse stance.
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, I am of
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the
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he
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the
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belief
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believes
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that all kinds of
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advertisements
advertesments
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advertisements
have to be rechecked by the authorities. My contention will be
further
explained. On one hand, doctors believe that any kind of fast
food
advertising should not be allowed.
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, junk-
food
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restaurants
restruants
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restaurants
if they just work on unhealthy
food
,
they
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will harm
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consumers
consumors
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consumers
which can
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cause
casue
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cause
many problems for youth. A prime example is KFC which started
new
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a new
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campaign
campagin
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campaign
for their new burger and added to the offer a
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game.
Hence
, what can be said
that
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any kind of street
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advertisements
advertisments
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advertisement
have
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to be checked before
allow
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allowing
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them.
On the other hand
, some citizens see that street restaurants can be useful if they will include
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healthy
healhy
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healthy
sandwiches
in
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their menus.
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, when
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couple
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get
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a short break they can find a
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nearby
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near by
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nearby
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food
seller which can provide them with the healthy
food
they need. A
salent
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salient
silent
example is Karam and Noha car
food
who started to sell
a
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free gluten bread,
free
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and free
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lactose milk.
Therefore
,not only burgers can be sold
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street
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but
also
healthy
food
. In conclusion, After
this
essay has shown different views about the advertisements, I am convinced that there are good
placed
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places
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which have to be allowed to publish their
serveses
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services
while
,
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there are many places
have
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that have
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to be
banded
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banned
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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