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Many high street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

#street #shops #business #years #development
Over the past
decades
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 the number of stores on the street
have
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 seen a meaningful decrease.
This
 reduction has been steep in the past two years due to
epidemic
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the epidemic
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 of Covid-19 and
obligation
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the obligation
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 to observe certain sanitary criteria for shopping
centers
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. With the advent of the internet as a modern means of communication among
the
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people around the world, the discussion initiated over e-business.
This
 phenomenon made the foundation for new ideas
such
 as online shopping in vast domains including clothing, food,
even
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 furniture. The spark of the disappearance of street shops was when people showed their willingness to buy their needs through the internet rather than on the street and shopping malls. The epidemic of covid-19 has
also
 helped e-business owners to grow their trades and develop the e-market. In fact, governments should have imposed certain criteria and in the
worst case
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scenario
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 they had to lock down the cities.
Therefore
, citizens are obliged to provide
their
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 needs via e-shops. The e-commerce boom has both negative and positive impacts on people’s daily life. It goes without saying that shopping through
the
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e-stores brings many benefits to
public
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the public
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.
Firstly
, they do not need to go out and get stuck in traffic for a couple of hours. In return, they remain at home and do shopping
by
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 a click.
Secondly
, they have access to various models and brands of a good in a virtual shop and they do not need to go shop by shop in order to find their
favorite
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 merchandise.
In contrast
,
this
 can cause
close
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 down
many
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of many
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 shops and
manufactures
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manufacturers
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 and
also
 unemployment of many
labors
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labourers
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 as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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