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You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am a
student
 of B.tech Civil Engineering and I want to draw your attention to an important
matter
. I recently lost my
student
 identity
card
 and
due to
 that, I am facing so many problems. Recently I went to the college mess for breakfast meal manager on entry asked for my
student
 identity
card
 as I lost my
card
 the manager declined my entry into the dining area. Even in the
student
 hostel, I faced the same problem the security guard wanted to see my badge and I was unable to do that. The principal makes a temporary note for me to get access to the hostel and mess. But for the college premises, I need an original
card
. The Principal asked me to contact you in
this
matter
. Can you please help me with
this
matter
 and re-issue the new
student
card
 as I am facing so many problems
.
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 I hope you understand my situation and help me with
this
matter
. I am waiting for your reply. Yours faithfully, Naresh Kumar
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains only one main idea to improve clarity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Organize the information in a logical order to make it easier for the reader to follow your argument. For instance, you can mention all the problems first and then explain the solutions.
coherence cohesion
Clarify the timeline of events to help the reader understand the sequence of the issues you've encountered.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task, including describing the situation, explaining the impact, and making a request.
task achievement
The tone is polite and formal, which is appropriate for a letter to the director of student services.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are correctly used, adding to the formal tone of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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