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Some people suggest that social networking and online communication have increased social isolation. In what ways do you think this has happened? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, some
people
 believe that the use of social networking and online communication methods coming from technological developments have a dramatic effect on our social bonds and became isolated from our surroundings. The
last
 decade is especially considered, I agree that they have weakened our social ties
instead
 of helping us.
Firstly
, when the topics regarding technology and social networking talk among
people
, many
people
 tend to assess them with regard to the young generation.
However
, in fact, rapidly developing technology supplied that almost everyone has at least one technological device,
such
 as a mobile phone or laptop, regardless of age, gender or occupation. In the past, if you wanted to contact grandparents, you needed to write a letter which is full of emotions and had to wait impatiently for a response or visited them wherever they live. Yet, nowadays, we can reach them by touching just one button on mobile phones. For
this
 reason, most
people
 prefer to communicate with them by devices
instead
 of visiting and hugging them. The elderly feel very isolated and even if they miss children or grandchildren, mostly can see them on their phone screens.
Secondly
, when it comes to younger ones, their all lives are passing with mobile phones or laptops. They tend to ignore what is happening around them, mostly they even do not know
their
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 parents’ daily lives as they spend all their time on social networking
instead
 of talking with their parents in the evening or any time of the day. While family relations are getting weaker and weaker, children assume that we do not depend on our families anymore, we are becoming independent.
Additionally
, if you go to a restaurant or a café, you will see a surprising scene where all
people
 there look at their phones rather than talking person who seat opposite. In conclusion,
Although
 technology and its consequences,
such
 as social networking and online communication, have a few benefits, They are about to break social bonds among relatives or friends because of lacking face-to-face communication
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