Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children’s who are taught to comperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give yout personal opinion too.

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t

is considered by some people that a

sense

of

competition

in

children

should be encouraged. Others believe that

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who are taught to

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cooperate

compete

comparative

comperate

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compete

rather than compete become more useful adults. İn my opinion , a

sense

of

competition

in

children

should be encouraged , and

thus

children

can be more confident in their schools.

Firstly

, whole

children

are sent to school by their parents , and

therefore

children

have the right education .

On the other hand

, provided education reveals

competition

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among

children

and

moreover

,

this

competition

is becoming different senses

such

as

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more confident and

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less shy . Unfortunately , there are many

student

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who

are

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is

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shy in

schools

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. İn addition , these

children

can'

t

talk with their teachers or their classmates . Many

children

can be rescued from

this

feature if

sense

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the sense

a sense

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of

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competition

competiton

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competition

should be encouraged among

children

.

For instance

, a shy child will be more confident if he will become

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competitor in his school.

Secondly

, another point to consider is that some people think

competition

is not necessary among

children

.

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According

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According

to these people ,

competition

causes

to

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bad effects

for

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on

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children

. İn my opinion , a child will live many troubles in his future job if he doesn'

t

have

the

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sense

of

competition

.

Therefore

many parents should

be

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encourage

encouraged

encoruage

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encourage

their

children

for

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to

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sense

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a sense

the sense

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of

competition

.

For instance

, a shy child who doesn'

t

has

the

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a

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sense

of

competition

never be

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a success

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success

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in her job. İn conclusion , the

sense

of

competition

should be encouraged for

children

by parents and

teacher

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teachers

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.

Thus

many

children

will become more confident thanks to

competititons

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competitions

competition

. İn my opinion ,

children

won'

t

live trouble in their future job

career

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if they will become

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a competitor

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competitor

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competitors

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.

Consequently

, the

sense

of

competition

should be encouraged

for

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children

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children

's will have a better future .