Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many today argue that the government is accountable for the increase in the problem of overweight

children

.

However

, I do not agree with

this

opinion as I believe that

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overconsumption

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over consumption

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overconsumption

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of

food

and less physical activity can cause

obesity

.

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Over consumption

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of meals especially unhealthy

food

plays a vital role in

the

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apply

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weight

control and

not

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mainly the responsibility of the government but of the parents or the caregivers.

Children

that

consumes

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large meals, snacks, and junk foods more than the recommended caloric intake for their age will mostly become obese

children

.

For instance

, those

children

that were provided by their caregivers

more

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with more

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fast-

food

meals, chips, chocolates and candies, and sodas rather than vegetables and fruits will more likely be heavier than

the

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their

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supposed to be normal

weight

.

Thus

, the quality and the amount of

food

intake

is

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accountable for the rise in

obesity

in

children

.

Moreover

, less

to

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no physical activity can

also

aggravate

obesity

in

children

. Nowadays, with the modernization of technology and easy access to

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handheld

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hand held

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handheld

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devices, kids chose to sit and play on their gadgets rather than do the actual playing. We are seeing

less

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children

on the playground and more

on

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in

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their rooms in front of their computers or tablets.

For example

, kids would play with characters on their game, on the screen online rather than play with their friends an actual game. Because of

this

, kids do not do any physical exercises that could burn their calories leading to

obesity

as well. In conclusion, I assume that the lifestyle of the

children

plays a vital role in their

weight

management that can be

influence

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by the caregiver rather than the government.

Food

intake and physical activity are two main aspects that

needs

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to be controlled to maintain a healthy

weight

.