Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many today argue that the government is accountable for the increase in the problem of overweight
children
. However
, I do not agree with this
opinion as I believe that Correct your spelling
overconsumption
over consumption
of Correct your spelling
overconsumption
food
and less physical activity can cause obesity
.
Correct your spelling
Overconsumption
Over consumption
of meals especially unhealthy Correct your spelling
Overconsumption
food
plays a vital role in the
Correct article usage
apply
weight
control and not
mainly the responsibility of the government but of the parents or the caregivers. Add a missing verb
is not
Children
that consumes
large meals, snacks, and junk foods more than the recommended caloric intake for their age will mostly become obese Change the verb form
consume
children
. For instance
, those children
that were provided by their caregivers more
fast-Change preposition
with more
food
meals, chips, chocolates and candies, and sodas rather than vegetables and fruits will more likely be heavier than the
supposed to be normal Change the word
their
weight
. Thus
, the quality and the amount of food
intake is
accountable for the rise in Correct subject-verb agreement
are
obesity
in children
.
Moreover
, less to
no physical activity can Change preposition
apply
also
aggravate obesity
in children
. Nowadays, with the modernization of technology and easy access to Correct your spelling
handheld
hand held
devices, kids chose to sit and play on their gadgets rather than do the actual playing. We are seeing Correct your spelling
handheld
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
children
on the playground and more on
their rooms in front of their computers or tablets. Change preposition
in
For example
, kids would play with characters on their game, on the screen online rather than play with their friends an actual game. Because of this
, kids do not do any physical exercises that could burn their calories leading to obesity
as well.
In conclusion, I assume that the lifestyle of the children
plays a vital role in their weight
management that can be influence
by the caregiver rather than the government. Wrong verb form
influenced
Food
intake and physical activity are two main aspects that needs
to be controlled to maintain a healthy Change the verb form
need
weight
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