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The table given illustrates five different nations in Europe’s figure of workers identified as
had
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 accomplished university education in 1999. As is shown in the table, the average percentage of all achieved 19.9%, in which women occupied 20.9%,
of
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2.1% higher than that of
men
. According to
this
, there were three sets of data that were near average level, Spain(18%), France(21%), and Germany (23%), in two of which
Men
 who completed education from university presented to be slightly higher than that of women, within 3%, which were both 25% in Spain and Germany, yet in France women’s figure was 24%, demonstrating a percentage of 6% over that of
men
.
On the contrary
,
other
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 two sets of data displayed a distance from average ones, in
Norway
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,Norway
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 it was
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28% of all workers’ relative figure, which was the highest standard of all five countries, in it women occupied 29.1%, 2% superior to that of
men
,
conversely
, stood for the lowest level, showing a percentage of 7% in the question, and
men
's university education background achieved to be 4% higher than woman's, of 9%.
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