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People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the main problems people in cities face, and how can these problems be tackled?

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It is no doubt true that the majority of
people
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 prefer to move to urban
cities
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 for better
life
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 and jobs.
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 mega policies are very attractive places to live, and they provide a wide range of different work and leisure opportunities, there are
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 a host of significant social problems affecting
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. The biggest problems of growing metropolises these days are overcrowding and different kinds of pollution. More and more
people
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 are migrating from smaller villages and towns in order to start a happy new
life
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 in big
cities
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. And it goes without saying that it imposes a serious threat to the environment. “Stone jungles” is not just a metaphor, but it is a real situation that many city dwellers have to face on a daily basis. The increasing number of
people
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 makes the construction companies build more and more living blocks, as the result to cut down city parks and forests. Since the
cities
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 are overcrowded, sometimes the basic infrastructure is missing as the government is not able to handle the problem of crowding.
People
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 don’t have enough
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simple things like playing grounds and kindergartens.
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, in Brazil
people
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 live in favelas due to
lack
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 of affordable housing, which increases the level of criminality. Luckily, there are some solutions that can help to handle
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 situation.
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, the government should start investing more money in small
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cities
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 developments, in order to make
life
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 in rural places more attractive. Towns have a very important advantage in comparison with big
cities
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,
life
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 is more peaceful and healthier there, so if the states will help to create all the necessary infrastructure and facilities, obviously, it will decrease the
people
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’s flow to big
cities
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.
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, new supermarkets, kindergartens and schools will increase the amount the vacant jobs,
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 the problem of labour shortage will be tackled. To sum up,
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 essay discussed the problems
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 as overpollution, overpopulation and space constraints faced by
people
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 living in
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city
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. Fortunately, the perspective isn’t that daunting, there are some solutions that can be imposed to change
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 situation for the better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolis
  • commute
  • public transportation
  • gridlock
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • expensive housing
  • exorbitant prices
  • work-life balance
  • recreation areas
  • parks and gardens
  • criminal activities
  • security measures
  • density
  • neighborhood
  • public amenities
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
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