Analysts tell us that many people today fell stressed and think they have insufficient control over their lives. What problems do such feelings cause for people? What remedies could you suggest?

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There is no doubt that stress is a great concern all over the world as many
people
have difficulty
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controlling their lives. In the following essay, I aim to identify the sources of
this
problem as well as some viable solutions to it. From my perspective, one of the most significant obstacles to
feel
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stressed is
shortage
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a shortage
the shortage
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of money. And it is not only one cause,
however
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all depend on money.
People
don’t
pay attention,
don’t
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and don’t
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devote time
for
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themselves. Most
of
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people
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the people
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don’t
give themselves to have a rest and do something new or do something which they enjoyed like a hobby. Many of us assume at the
first
time they work to earnings, that’s why they
don’t
work
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activities and they
don’t
feel
themselves
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pleased. When
people
sense
satisfied
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then
they
are
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take
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caring
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to
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face
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,
to
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skin
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the skin
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, to
behavior
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. There are several solutions that could be taken to solve the issues.
First
,
people
should try to get a job, which they relish from it and it should not be a profession, but a hobby and
this
brings a lot of money. According to analyst physical activities
such
as yoga affects the brain so it reduces stress
effectively
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helps us improve sleep and concentration.
Second
, a successful person
take
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care of his appearance,
this
applies not only to clothes but
also
to the face, hair and figure. These habits will improve health and reduce stress in life. In conclusion, nowadays being stressed is very high, so
people
have to improve their health and reduce depression.
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