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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #age
It's an incredible thing in
this
 world, two
people
 being found and falling in love with each other until they decide to get married. An important question is, how old should
people
 allow to get married? In my point of view, I agree that youth should be married at age 21 or older. I have two main reasons, which are emotional balance and financial stability.
First
 of all, when teenagers are older, be more emotional balance. They are learning, growing, and getting more experience. It helps to decrease the conflict among
people
, because of connecting and communication in daily life.
For instance
, when they are coincidently misunderstood, they are furious and improperly manner with them. Meanwhile, the other chooses not to react aggressively, because of understanding and emotional stabilities.
In addition
, if they are still immature, they can respond negatively, as if they were shouting in return. Not only for
people
 but
also
 for the couple, lacking a cautious temper can lead to an issue between each other.
Secondly
, puberty comes with financial stabilities, the responsibility of managing money, career, and if children result in family harmony. Having a family and giving birth to kids at 17 or 18 can lead to monetary problems.
For example
, During that period, they are either spending funds for studying at university, buying a new habitant, or initiating business.
Then
, getting pregnant with no financial support from the parent will tend to occur economic problems later.
However
, considering both these sets of arguments, I believe that we can gain more
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 advantage because
people
 will have more essential emotional balance and financial stabilities way.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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