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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, with the development of science and technology, every house in the world can afford a
TV
 and a
computer
. With
this
 development,
children
 can watch
TV
 more and play
computer
games
 for their age more. But some people believe that reading
stories
 from a
book
 is better for
children
 than watching
TV
 or playing
computer
games
. In my opinion, reading will help
children
 more than watching
TV
 or playing
video
games
. On one hand, watching
TV
 or playing
video
games
 on the
computer
 is a good way for
children
 to entertain themselves. There are many
TV
 shows teaching
children
 about subjects
such
 as “5 English Vocabulary every day” on VTV7, teaching them English vocabulary around the topic of the show every day, or “Discovery Science-Giant Experience” on VTV7, giving
children
 knowledge about physics through the experiments showed in the show, etc.
Video
games
also
 play an important role in helping
children
 entertain themselves. There is a
game
 called “Minecraft” on computers where
children
 can build giant buildings in it, explore the enormous world of the
game
, play with friends online, etc. When playing Minecraft, the
children
 think that they are the main character of the
game
, allowing them to do anything they want in the
game
. But playing
video
games
, as well as watching
TV
 for a long time makes the
children
 tired and sometimes, resulted in short sight.
On the other hand
, reading
stories
 in a
book
 allows
children
 to use their imaginations. When reading, they will imagine the scenery described in the
story
, how the characters in the
story
 look, how they move, etc. When reading
stories
, they
also
 feel that they are the main character in the
story
, allowing them to imagine themselves in the
story
, as well as understand the meaning of the
story
.
For example
, when reading the
story
 of Robin Hood, they can imagine that they are Robin Hood, who steals from the rich and gives the stolen money to the poor
then
 understand the meaning of the
story
. Basically, reading
stories
 from a
book
 allows
children
 to use their imagination, as well as to understand the meaning of the
story
. In conclusion, reading
stories
 from a
book
 is better for
children
 than playing
video
games
 or watching
TV
, as it allows them to use their imagination.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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