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Scientists predict that cars will be driven by computers, not people in the near future. Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It has been predicted by some, that
humans
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 will witness, in the upcoming years, robotic
cars
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 on the streets because of the rapid revolution of technology.
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 I find myself inclined to give
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 development a five-star rating.
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, there is a potential danger impeded in depending completely on machines which are directed by robots. To commence with merits, I find as many others, auto-drive
cars
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 could save
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 and effort done by
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. In the sense that, drivers would not be nervous on roads as usual, as the advanced technology in these types of
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, offers accurate computers to calculate speed and monitor the road to either slow down in traffic or resume speed within the permitted limits when possible.
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, Masdar, the ultimate advanced city in the UAE operates
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 of
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 kind on its roads to protect individuals and less the figures of collided vehicles on the streets. At the same
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, it is undeniable, that machinery could break down at any
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 even if it was manufactured with high quality.
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,
humans
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 can not rely on these auto-pilot
cars
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 for one hundred per cent.
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, in the near
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, the manufacturer company of Tesla announced to its customers that they need to pay attention to their ways, as their
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 failed in many tests to identify children as a danger so they did not stop the engine until the car collided with the body. To conclude, The aforementioned points clearly show the pros of giving computers the command to drive, As the positive aspects reflect on
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' safety and health , but it clearly illustrated that it should remain monitored by the driver . Whereas, the complete absence of human attention on the auto
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' performance could lead to high potential risks.

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