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Band 3.5

Give your opinion based on data about passengers using different train tracks.

The given table compares the underground
railway
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 networks in six cities in terms of their
opened
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 date,
extention
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extension
, and
a
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number of
passengers
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 per
year
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. Overall, it is clear that the London
railway
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 is the oldest, followed by the Paris and Tokyo railways respectively.
In addition
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, the
railway
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 in Los Angeles is the latest one.
However
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, the older railways serve a significantly higher number of
passengers
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 than the newer ones. The
railway
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 in London is opened in 1863, which is extended for 394
Km
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 and facilitates 775
passengers
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 per
year
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. The
second
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 oldest
railway
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 in Paris, which provides its service to 1191
passengers
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 per
year
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.
This
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 is stated in 1900 and is extended to nearly 200
Km
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.
On the other hand
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, the highest number of
passengers
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 using the Tokyo
railway
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 network(1927), which is opened in 1927, and is extended to 155 Kilometres.
In contrast
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, the underground
railway
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 system in Washington DC began in 1976 and extended for exactly 126Km, which serves 144
passengers
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 annually.
Then
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, the Los Angeles
railway
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 opened after 25 years and used a
third
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 of the
passengers
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 as the Washington DC yearly.
This
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railway
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 system is lengthened only by 28
Km
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. The smallest
railway
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 system ;Kyoto is opened in 1981,which is 11Km long and provides
it's
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 service to 45
passengers
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 per
year
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.

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