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The rise of the convienence foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle.What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today, everyone is getting so busy that we are always trying to invent things which are less time-consuming and easy to perform.
This
 search has led to the finding of convenience
foods
 which are much faster and easier to make. These convenience
foods
 have their advantages but disadvantages as well. On the one side, ready-to-eat
foods
 have made our life so easier that we don’t have to spend a long time cooking ourselves dinner or lunch. We can get these ready packets of
food
 from any convenience stores nearby and cook it at home in less than ten minutes.
In addition
 to
this
, they don't require any prior cooking experience.They usually come up with the how-to make instructions on the box and our pretty easy to perform.
Moreover
, we don’t have to spend money on buying other things which we require when cooking at home.
On the other hand
, eating these
foods
 on daily basis is not good for our health. As these
foods
 consist of various types of preservatives and chemicals which can affect our bodies in future.
For instance
, frozen
foods
 are always high in sodium and doctors have recently reported that high sodium
food
 can cause various health-related issues.
In addition
 to
this
, these
foods
 consist of fewer nutrients than the
food
 which is prepared fresh.
As a result
, our body can become deficient in nutrients and minerals which we use to get from fresh
food
. In conclusion, Health is wealth.
Although
 they have made our life a little easier we should not depend on them entirely. As high consumption of these things can lead to various health issues.
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