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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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In many countries governments believe that economic development is much more important
however
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, some
people
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 say that other types of areas in the environment, and infrastructures are
also
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 important for a
country
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. I reciprocate both views.
Firstly
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, governments are giving more focus to build a nation economically in a good state because when a
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 is stable economically
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 there are a lot of chances to become a developed nation.
this
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 is why some
government
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 gives more importance to economic growth.
Secondly
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, countries' foreign investments and exports are the main components to increase wealth, which helps the
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 to spend the money to improve different areas.
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, if the
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 has some funds from the tradings so they can use that to improve different sectors without borrowing the money from another
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 say that
government
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 should give equal importance to all other departments as well. It is a reasonable debate because if a
country
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 is well in economics but without proper education, medical facilities and infrastructure is definitely a lack of development.
people
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 should have the facilities to educate themselves easily.
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, There are still a lot of remote areas which do not have proper electricity. In
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 ,case
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 should prioritise all developments rather than concentrate on the nation's economic growth. In my opinion, both views are important but sometimes
people
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 do not know what happening around them by the
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's actions, so the
government
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 can let know the
people
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 about their investments and plans to develop the
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. In
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 ,way
people
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 can understand that the
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 doing the right thing. To conclude
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 topic, As I mentioned earlier it is good for a
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 developing well but at the same time, the
government
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 should expose its plans to the
people
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 to maintain belief in
government
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.
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