Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre to save money. Write a letter to your council. In your letter -Give details on how you and your family use the centre. -explain why the centre is important for the local community. -describe the potential effects on local people if the centre closes.
Dear Madam Maxine,
The reason I am writing to you is to express my opinion about closing our local centre and to ask you not to do that.
To begin
with, my family and I always visit the "ABC" centre for 3 main reasons: there is a gym, a cinema, and it is the only convenient place, which has all that we need, in our town. Importantly, there are a lot of clothes magazines, supermarkets and pharmacies, and the most important are facilities where kids can have a great time.
Secondly
, I do not know anyone who doesn't love visiting centres. It is just so convenient. Think about citizens in this
area, especially those with kids. Where will they take their small children at the weekend? Or where will they go if they urgently need something to buy.
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Therefore
, this
choice is not a good one.
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Last
last
but not least, it will only make people angry, which can lead to massive dissatisfaction and protests. Moreover
, everyone used to go there up to three times a week, so it must make a good profit.
I hope I made myself clear and you will change your mind. Thank you in advance.
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task response
Your letter clearly addresses all the parts of the task with relevant, extended and supported ideas. For an even higher score, consider expanding your arguments with more detailed examples or evidence.
coherence and cohesion
You've managed to organize your letter in a logical manner with paragraphs, each dedicated to a different idea. To enhance your coherence further, work on smoother transitions between paragraphs for a more fluid reading experience.
tone
While the overall writing tone is appropriate, using a slightly more formal register and avoiding conversational phrases could make your letter more effective. Consider revising phrases that seem too informal for written correspondence to a council.
task response
Excellent task engagement, covering all aspects required with clear, relevant points.
structure
Good use of paragraphs to separate ideas, making your letter easy to follow.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,
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