Children’s education is expensive. In some countries, governments pay partly or all education fees. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There has been a controversy that in some countries, the governments pay part or all
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fees. I think
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situation is advantageous to the government to increase the national educational level, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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, decreasing the number of unlettered people in the countries. It was expected that
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was private and it was only for nobles in the past because it didn't only include the general tuition fees but it
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involved a strict hierarchy.
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, the illiteracy rate was incredibly high in the past.
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,
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situation has changed in today's modern society.
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is no longer exclusively for nobles, the general public has the right to gain knowledge as well. Take China as an example. According to Chinese policy that elementary and middle
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in China are completely free.
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, the national illiteracy rate has dropped dramatically, and
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a chance can lead the country to become more civilized.
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, it's good for society's harmony. As we know, whenever there is domestic chaos within the country, people who are underaged are affected substantially.
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, there are frequent wars in Africa;
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, the number of child labour is considerably high not only because
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are too expensive for these kids but
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because
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chaotic atmosphere forces kids to work to support their families. In
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case, if the government could financially support those kids to finish school,
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we can lead to a harmonious society.
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, free
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has demerits as well.
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, it extends the gap between different social classes. It's commonplace that private
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are invariably more expensive than public
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; these private
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have better teachers and course content will be more complicated than public
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.
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, when different classes receive different
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,
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a situation can worsen the friction between different classes. In conclusion, I believe the merits of free
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outstrip its demerits.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • access to education
  • financial burden
  • education quality
  • equal opportunities
  • investment in human capital
  • economic development
  • cost burden
  • misuse of funds
  • motivation
  • perform well
  • limited choice
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