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In the present era, people mostly depend on the consumer products for living smoothly. These items give a number of benefits to someone’s life besides the some problems it might bring

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Following the development of technology, many gadgets and
products
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 are becoming essential
items
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 in
people
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's daily
life
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. These
items
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 bring convenience to
people
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's lives, but they are some problems that came after which are that
people
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 are getting less active and lack physical movement. Admittedly, many
products
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 on the market nowadays are making our
life
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 easier, a lot of work that could not be done easily by human power alone become easy tasks in the blink of an eye.
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,
people
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 had to walk miles to get to the destination which might take them a few days, but luckily, nowadays vehicles had invented which help
people
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 easily travel to wherever they want.
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, after high technology gadgets
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 as mobile phones have invented, our world became closer,
people
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 now can make a phone call or video call to connect to the other side of the globe which is impossible in the past. The great benefits of
products
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 and
items
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 in modern
life
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 bring convenience to many
people
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 in society which is now become an essential thing in their
life
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.
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, those
products
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 could be poison to our bodies, due to the convenience that
people
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 have got from those
items
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,
people
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 tend to reduce their physical exercise which impacts an individual's health in the short and long term.
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, some
people
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 prefer using cars
instead
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 of walking to work which might take them only 10 minutes and a lot of
people
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 tend to stay at home shopping online
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 of going out with friends or family members to the shopping malls which is a good way to exercise and to spend quality time with friends and family. In conclusion,
although
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 consumer
products
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 bring us many impressive impacts on
people
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's lives, those
items
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 might take away our health in terms of lack of physical exercise.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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