It has been suggested that primary children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some individuals suggested that primary
kids
need to study about growing
vegetables
and
keep
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pets. In my opinion, there are certain downsides
with
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this
trend but
this
brings benefits for the growth of
children
in the future. The most disadvantages of
this
is
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space for
kids
to activity and costs. The main one is the city does not have more open land for
children
, it is mostly used to build high buildings and economic development so
this
has become difficult.
For instance
, growing
vegetables
and
keep
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animals
that need must land, at Vinschool
where
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which
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have huge grounds suitable for
grow
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of
kids
at
this
issue but
school
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must invest millions into infrastructure. It means that the
school
will have a rebalancing of the spending budget
such
as reducing teachers' salaries and saving students' tuition fees to be reasonable with
this
investment. Many parents will not be able to afford
paying
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for their child's
school
fees and
this
leads them to choose another environment
that is
more suitable for their
kid
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kids
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. Despite the drawbacks, giving attention to growing
vegetables
and keeping pets has benefits too. The
first
and vital
most
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advantage is knowledge. To explain, when at
school
,
children
learn how to raise
animals
and take care of plants, they will have a certain understanding of the nutrients of each plant and animal.
Therefore
, they can establish a meal that ensures balanced nutrition for themselves.
For example
, students of Vinschool might grow their own
vegetables
such
as tomatoes, carrots and other
vegetables
, which provide many sources of vitamins and are healthy food. Not only that
,
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the
children
here are
also
facilitated by the
school
to raise
animals
such
as cats,
birds
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and birds
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, ... so that the
kids
form a habit of loving pets and understand the value of
animals
that are significant in the natural environment. In summary, exposing
children
to how to grow
vegetables
and raise
animals
will have certain environmental difficulties but it
also
benefits a lot in the process of
children
growing up. It helps
children
to love nature and have knowledge about
vegetables
that are rich in vitamins and minerals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary children
  • grow vegetables
  • keep animals
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • practical skills development
  • environmental awareness
  • health benefits
  • instilling responsibility
  • learning about food production
  • time commitment
  • maintenance costs
  • safety concerns
  • curriculum constraints
  • limited resources
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