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In the future all cars ,buses and trucks will be driverless.the only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers . Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweighs the disadvantages ?

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recent times , we are living in a fast developing world . Due to that development we
can
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 we can assume that in the future all cars,buses,
trucks
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and trucks
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 will be
driverless
.
In other words
: only passengers can travel inside those transportation
machines
 .Personally speaking, I believe that in spite of the benefits , the drawbacks of
driverless
 transportation
machines
 are much more. In
this
 essay ,I will discuss and outline why I believe that the cons are more effective and
outweighs
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 the pros. My
first
 and most important point is that
although
 many people’s attention
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 to focus on how
driverless
 vehicles going to make their life easier , deep down the same people will never trust technology in
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 of “safe rides”.
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, from people’s past experience with
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technology
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 they attend to understand that technology sometimes
contain
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 some errors .
As a result
 of that understanding and the fear of not
to have
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 a safe journey, they will never
fell
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 comfortable
to travel
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 in
driverless
 cars . My
second
 point is that
driverless
machines
 could be dangerous for children.
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 a child could get into a
driverless
 car and decide to go out without telling their parents.So in that case the child could be in danger and no one knows . To sum up , even though there are many benefits of
driverless
 transportation
machines
 , the drawbacks are much more important to be highlighted.I personally think that these
type
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 of
machines
 should not be available for personal use
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aim
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 of not putting people’s lives in danger.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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