Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. odilo To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

We used to hear that
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musice
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is
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the bridge that can connect
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, they are not understanding the lyrics but they can feel it by listening and enjoying the
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. Most
people
like a
music
beat before they understand the meaning of it. That
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why
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people
can connect
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other easily
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, we come from
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country
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countries

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, or background
culture
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cultures

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.
Hence
, I definitely opine
this
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topic
then
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next
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with, if we ask what
are
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activities
that
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you love
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do
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the most, one of chosen is listening to
music
for sure.
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the
next
question is what kind of
music
you usually listen
.
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In over
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the
world
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we have
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of
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the genre
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genre
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that we can listen
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on what type of
music
you like
such
as folk
song
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, hip-hop, R&B, and pop
song
.
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, we can
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by nationality
for
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instance, K-pop (Korean
song
), T-pop (Thai
song
), and J-pop (
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song
).
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,
depend
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on what type or kind
music
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of music

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you love to
listening
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to.
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,
music
can bring
people
from another country, or culture
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to become

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become
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friend
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friends

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by
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similar likeness. It means they are able to connect
each
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other too easily and can reduce the gap of difference.
Furthermore
, the gap of ages as well example if you are not close with your family but you love to listening
music
same type of your parents. For
this
reason, you can use
this
for
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start your conversation with them. To summarise, you can hear
song
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since
we
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are born, so
music
is part of our life. If we do not have it in our life. It stays with us all the time
,
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when we are sleeping, eating, or dancing. Every moment
all
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has
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music
.
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, help us to
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becom
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friend through
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