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Band 7

You have recently been on a vacation in a foreign country and stayed at a home-stay, you have realised that you have misplaced an expensive wristwatch and cannot find it. Write a letter to the family you stayed with. In your letter: Give details of your stay Describe your wristwatch If found how they could return it to you. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ........

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Dear sran family, I am writing
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 letter to show my gratitude towards your hospitality during my stay in your house as it was a life-memorable experience for me and at the same time l feel bad to let you know that I left my smartwatch in your house. The wristwatch is Fitbit Versa 4 and the colour is black. It has a black band and the serial number is1444221311. Actually, before sleeping, I took it off my wrist and left it on the table beside the bed. Unfortunately,
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, when I woke up in the morning, I totally forgot to put it on before leaving. If you find it, I would really appreciate it if you could send it with a parcel to my address l. I will bear all the expenses of the parcel paid by you. Looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours Sincerely, Jaspreet

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coherence cohesion
While your letter has a good overall structure, ensure that each paragraph strictly adheres to a single idea for clarity. For instance, you could elaborate a bit more on your enjoyable experiences to create a stronger emotional connection.
task achievement
Ensure that the wording is always consistent. For example, instead of saying 'wristwatch', stick with 'smartwatch' if that is what you mean. This will avoid any confusion for the reader.
tone
Your gratitude and positive tone throughout the letter create a warm and respectful atmosphere, which is appropriate for the context.
clarity
The details about the wristwatch, including the model and serial number, provide a clear description that will help identify it easily.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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