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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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• It is popularly believed by many individuals that humans which read publications are able to
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 most creative power and
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communication
communicaton
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 abilities than
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 who rather
to
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observe
televesion
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television
. From my point of view, the
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 way is
more
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preferable and effective and in
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 I will discuss these two viewpoints in a depth. • In our modern lifetime technology and times are
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evolving
involving
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 and so are the techniques. According to statistics, a lot of
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 and senior people watch
television
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 preferable to read books. Viewing
information
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 and language skills on
television
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 is fun and affordable
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 too that
information
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 can be learned quickly. Take an example
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 way is very convenient for mankind
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 repugnance to read books.
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,
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most humans
are not agree
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do not agree
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they prefer to improve their knowledge and expand their worldview through reading, because the
person
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 who reads the
information
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 does not feel any discomfort, getting
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 from
television
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 is not more useful than getting it from a
book
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.
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 to that, there is a world of difference between a
person
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 who reads a
book
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 and a
person
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 who receives
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 on
television
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person
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the person
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 who watches TV is more beautiful than a
person
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 who reads a
book
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 • In conclusion, the contradiction between reading and watching is getting stronger
day
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 by
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, some people recommend reading, some people recommend watching TV, but I think it is better to read in a
book
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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