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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #books #imagination #language #skills #tv
• It is popularly believed by many individuals that humans which read publications are able to
the
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 most creative power and
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communication
communicaton
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communication
 abilities than
these
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 who rather
to
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observe
televesion
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television
. From my point of view, the
second
 way is
more
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preferable and effective and in
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 I will discuss these two viewpoints in a depth. • In our modern lifetime technology and times are
envolving
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evolving
involving
day
 by
day
 and so are the techniques. According to statistics, a lot of
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 and senior people watch
television
 preferable to read books. Viewing
information
 and language skills on
television
 is fun and affordable
in addition
 too that
information
 can be learned quickly. Take an example
this
 way is very convenient for mankind
who
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 repugnance to read books.
However
,
the
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most humans
are not agree
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do not agree
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 with
this
 because
of
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they prefer to improve their knowledge and expand their worldview through reading, because the
person
 who reads the
information
 does not feel any discomfort, getting
information
 from
television
 is not more useful than getting it from a
book
.
In addition
 to that, there is a world of difference between a
person
 who reads a
book
 and a
person
 who receives
information
 on
television
.
For instance
:
person
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the person
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 who watches TV is more beautiful than a
person
 who reads a
book
 • In conclusion, the contradiction between reading and watching is getting stronger
day
 by
day
, some people recommend reading, some people recommend watching TV, but I think it is better to read in a
book
.
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