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computers are being used more and more in education. some people say that this a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. discuss both sides of the arguments and the give your own opinion.

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It is undeniably true that the world is unimaginable without
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 ,especially in the
education
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 system. In fact, the use of
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 in studies is omnipresent. Some people believe that
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 bring innumerable benefits to the
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 system, while others say that they have adverse repercussions. While
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 might cause problems to some extent, I believe that
computers
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 play a critical role in
education
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. On the one hand, people think that
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 is a positive development because
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 made many things possible, which were impossible in the past. One prime example is distance learning programs, which enable thousands of students to get higher
education
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 while they are working part-time or full-time. To exemplify
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 point, we can consider a survey completed by Ajtak that more than 50% of employees received post-graduation degree certificates by enrolling in these learning programs, which of course, is impossible without
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. Apart from
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, instructor-led virtual sessions have removed the dependency on the number of participants, now as many students can join the session without disturbing the class.
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, no one can deny the negative impact of
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. The major adverse effect it has is that the popularity of the teaching profession has decreased drastically.
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, students are now independent of tutors as they can find information on a computer with the help of the internet,
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, the number of jobs in teaching professions is reduced.
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, continuous use of
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 for long hours causes health problems like strained eyes and promotes a sedentary lifestyle.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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