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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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Money and material belongings are great criteria for
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 . In my perspective, these kinds of things are not completely involved in successful perception so, the initial requirements of
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 are living life with a deeper level of sense of fulfilment. Material things are never measured of the successful because they are not an integral part of happiness.
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,
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 is the only tool to become happy,
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, material belongings can not
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 make happy.
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,
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 devote their time and energy due to earning much more material things and money. Unfortunately, they are not able to understand that human desire is never-ending
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, they never reach pure successful feelings.
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 of all, before explaining the meaning of achievement investigate the successful
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's lives and answer some questions: Who is the successful
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? How can become a successful
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? And what is the similarity between them? Successful
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 are not about to deal with some situations they
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 have some mental strength, willpower and tenacity so, all of them assist the
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 to fight any kind of challenge. Apart from that, they never give up if face hardship and find solutions wisely.
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, they never lose calmness and mental stability. All of them are the most significant characteristic of a successful
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. In conclusion, I would have mentioned that material possessions and wealth are not able to implement to make deep feelings of happiness.
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,
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 never reach
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 unless taking into account the importance of positive characteristics
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 as willpower, patience, and perseverance.
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