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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extend do you agree?

#scientists #technology #experts #society #musicians #artists
In
society
,
scientists
 and
experts
 seem to be more important than
musicians
 and
artisits
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artists
.
Modren
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Modern
society
 affects due to
musicians
 and artists rather than
scientists
 and
technology
experts
. On one hand, the more important value of modern
society
 is
scientists
 and
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technology
tehcnology
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technology
experts
. They
work
 hard to bring change in
society
 and provide
us
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our
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 latest
technology
for example
 computers, machines,
automachines
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auto machines
, etc. In recent years, when there
was
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were
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 no
technology
people
 did not aware
what
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of what
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 to do. They really did hard
work
 for themselves. But
now a days
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nowadays
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,
technology
 is growing fast. All
work
done
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is done
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 by machines. There is no need for
people
 to do all
kind
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 of
work
. Most
work
done
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is done
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 by
technology
 like cashiers doing all their jobs on computers,
doctors
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and doctors
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prescription
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prescriptions
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all
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are all
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 done by computer. There is no need for paper and pen to write
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a prescription
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prescription
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prescriptions
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 by
doctor
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a doctor
the doctor
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. I agree that they play an important part in
community
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the community
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.
On the other hand
,
musicians
 and artists are only for
enjoyment
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the enjoyment
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 of
society
. They perform their songs for fun and enjoyment. They create some smiles and
excitment
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excitement
to
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for
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 the
people
 of
community
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the community
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. In conclusion, The importance of
experts
 and
scientists
are
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is
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 more important than
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anyone
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any one
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anyone
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 else.
However
,
musicians
 and artists
also
 play role in
society
. They give
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 moments and fun time to
people
.
As a
result
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,result
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 both play an important role
for
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in
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society
 but
experts
 are more important because they make life easy to make better products.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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