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use of internet in education. do you agree or disagree?

#internet #education
İn recent years, spending time on the internet is getting deeply increased. Especially from 2022 onwards with the pandemic circumstances providing a large amount of using the internet. İn Addition virtual educations are more popular. That s why I support and hope for more advanced day by day. Depending on the increasing of using the internet, many costs of living may relief. For ,example the students who receive face-to-face lessons are able to go to the course,
thus
 the expenditure steps may rise after that the cost provides more consumption with bills and electricity. İn fact , the teachers who teach would not go anywhere, transportation costs would slow down.
Therefore
 environmental defection may not appear all around the world. On the other ,hand participants who attend an online course can arrange their own daily without any transportation or any journey. For ,example before the pandemic , many English courses could build one into one system or classroom education,
therefore
 many populations have to arrange themselves times.
Thus
 the people would have to spend more time to be wasted. But there are more leisure times in
this
 way
this
 remains in order to unwind. İn briefly, Virtual education rate should be prefered by all countryside.
Therefore
this
 keeps up with fewer bills and less cost of living.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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