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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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In
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 era of globalization and advancement where people prioritize their career and future and migrate to
countries
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 offering great revenues,
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 adjusting to different
countries
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 with different languages and cultures is crucial as well as challenging.
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 can result in major
issues
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 for an outsider socially and practically. The major social issue people face in a country as an outsider is overcoming the language barrier and developing good communication skills ,
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 they have to work hard to learn the language and
culture
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 of the country. For ,example if a
person
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 needs any health care assistance in a hospital, he must have to be efficient enough to deliver his problem and understand the advice of a doctor. Other
issues
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 include adaptation to their
culture
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 and social norms that can be misjudged by a
person
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 from another
culture
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. For ,example drinking alcohol publicly in non-muslim
countries
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 is common , while
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 is taken as a prohibited act in Muslim
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. Getting a job as a foreigner is a big practical challenge, so a
person
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 can not gain the trust of the local community which leads to grave conditions. For ,example if a
person
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 works in a restaurant and cannot get a respectable response from the people, he might get discouraged and face serious mental health
issues
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. Starting a new business or setting up a new project would get a lot of energy, patience and time to get approved by the locals and
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 can turn into a waste of money and time due to the major difference in understanding and adapting a
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. To conclude, I would agree that being a foreigner one has to face many
issues
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 and time to get accepted by the local community so a
person
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 should educate himself and has a flexible nature towards the natives and their
culture
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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