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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this can be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?

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Some
people
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 argue that having his own
house
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instead
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 of being a tenant is essential. In my view, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. In
this
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 essay I will
first
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, discuss why owning a
house
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 is positive and
secondly
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, I will explain the cons of
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 situation.
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 with, having a
house
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 could be beneficial when it comes to thinking about financial assets. It is universally known that a
house
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 located in an attractive area can gain value in the future. Going deeper, in western countries houses is the only asset for thousands of
people
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.
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, according to a French real estate survey, 20% of French
people
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 own a
house
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 and in
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 20%, 80% declared that their accommodation was their only acquisition.
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, the
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 is the most common property that
people
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 like to bequeath, generally to their children. Anybody knows that it is generally tricky to start a
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 without any property. beginning his
life
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 knowing that we already have a
house
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 in the portfolio is a huge advantage and has a dramatic impact on our
life
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. According to the French minister of home affairs, 60% of
people
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 who got a property thanks to a family member, are more likely to succeed in
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.
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, owning a
house
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 has some disadvantages. The
first
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 one is related to the danger of owning a
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 in our modern era. Nowadays, with environmental transformations and global ,warming many houses are situated in dangerous zones.
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 in Australia, many accommodations have been destructed due to environmental disasters. To sum up, despite the risks of losing accommodation because of environmental disasters, I'm sincerely convinced that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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