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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this can be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?

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Some
people
 argue that having his own
house
instead
 of being a tenant is essential. In my view, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. In
this
 essay I will
first
, discuss why owning a
house
 is positive and
secondly
, I will explain the cons of
this
 situation.
To begin
 with, having a
house
 could be beneficial when it comes to thinking about financial assets. It is universally known that a
house
 located in an attractive area can gain value in the future. Going deeper, in western countries houses is the only asset for thousands of
people
.
For instance
, according to a French real estate survey, 20% of French
people
 own a
house
 and in
this
 20%, 80% declared that their accommodation was their only acquisition.
In addition
, the
house
 is the most common property that
people
 like to bequeath, generally to their children. Anybody knows that it is generally tricky to start a
life
 without any property. beginning his
life
 knowing that we already have a
house
 in the portfolio is a huge advantage and has a dramatic impact on our
life
. According to the French minister of home affairs, 60% of
people
 who got a property thanks to a family member, are more likely to succeed in
life
.
However
, owning a
house
 has some disadvantages. The
first
 one is related to the danger of owning a
house
 in our modern era. Nowadays, with environmental transformations and global ,warming many houses are situated in dangerous zones.
For example
 in Australia, many accommodations have been destructed due to environmental disasters. To sum up, despite the risks of losing accommodation because of environmental disasters, I'm sincerely convinced that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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