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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that over the
last
 decade, learning other's
nation
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Language
 has
became
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hot
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 topic in
education
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 System. In
this
 essay, I will shed some light on the merits and the demerits of learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 at primary school rather than
secendory
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secondary
 school.
First
 and foremost, Studying
unique
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a unique
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language
 in childhood makes very strong basics which help
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the student
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student
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students
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 to grasp
advance
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topic
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topics
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 easily in minimal time.English is one of the genres of Foreign languages which uses across the globe.
This
 helps in various ways like
Student
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Students
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 can attempt competitive
exam
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exams
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 of any other state in
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English
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english
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the english
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language
 which gives them hope to grab
goverenment
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government
job
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jobs
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.
Moreover
, National sports players can communicate with international players which helps them learn
different
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about different
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culture
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cultures
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.
In addition
 to
this
, Doing international
trades
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trade
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 becomes feasible as communication becomes easy which
further
 increases the economic rate of any nation.
for example
, Around three decades ago,
Japanese
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the Japanese
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Government
Goverenment
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government
have
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 imposed teaching
english
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English
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 as
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 which has given
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fruitful
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a frutiful
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frutiful
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fruitful
result
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results
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 now
,.
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 The GDP has increased from 4.3% to 8.4% which makes japan now
developed
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a developed
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 country.
On the
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, there are
few
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 demerits
also
.Emphasizing
on
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non-native
language
 from primary school leads to de-prioritize the learning of
mother
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 tongue
language
 and due to
this
,
younger
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the younger
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 generation
have
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 trivial knowledge about ancient culture ,
rituals
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and rituals
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.
Secondly
,
This
 leads to adapting
of
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 western culture which changes the lifestyle of
asian
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Asian
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 country people.
For instance
, According to
survey
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a survey
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 of Indian Hindu society, 5.3% of present generation kids have lesser knowledge
on
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of
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national
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the national
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language
. Having considered
range
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a range
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 of arguments, I have drawn
an
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 conclusion that
although
 there are demerits of learning
non-national
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the non-national
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language
 at primary but the Studying
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 has more merits as
this
 opens the
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opportunity
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 of
cross country
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 communication,
business
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and business
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trades
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trade
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 and hikes the economic rate of
nation
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the nation
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.
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