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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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hot
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 System. In
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 at primary school rather than
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secondary
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 and foremost, Studying
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 in childhood makes very strong basics which help
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 to grasp
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 easily in minimal time.English is one of the genres of Foreign languages which uses across the globe.
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 helps in various ways like
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 can attempt competitive
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 of any other state in
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english
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 which gives them hope to grab
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government
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, National sports players can communicate with international players which helps them learn
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culture
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cultures
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 to
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, Doing international
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 becomes feasible as communication becomes easy which
further
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, Around three decades ago,
Japanese
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the Japanese
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Government
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government
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 imposed teaching
english
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 as
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 which has given
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fruitful
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frutiful
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fruitful
result
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results
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 now
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 The GDP has increased from 4.3% to 8.4% which makes japan now
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 country.
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Contrary
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, there are
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 demerits
also
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non-native
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 from primary school leads to de-prioritize the learning of
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 tongue
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 and due to
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,
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 generation
have
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 trivial knowledge about ancient culture ,
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and rituals
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,
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 leads to adapting
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 western culture which changes the lifestyle of
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 country people.
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, According to
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 of Indian Hindu society, 5.3% of present generation kids have lesser knowledge
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national
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language
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. Having considered
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 of arguments, I have drawn
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 conclusion that
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 there are demerits of learning
non-national
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 at primary but the Studying
foreign
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language
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 has more merits as
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 opens the
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opportunity
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 of
cross country
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 communication,
business
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and business
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trades
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trade
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 and hikes the economic rate of
nation
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the nation
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.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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