The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. Do the advantages outweighs the disadvantages.

Nowadays there is an increasing trend of convince
food
. It has helped
human
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humans
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with the speed of
modernity
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life. There are arguments
of
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on
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both sides;
however
, from my point of
view
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this
trend has more benefits than demerits. On one
hand
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this
food
can cause health problems.
In other words
, lots of
people
buy bad quality
food
, so that can be
problem
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a problem
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for most
people
. It
also
can cause overweight.
For
instance
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in Poland
company
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a company
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named "Zabka" produce lots of unhealthy
food
without any
witamins
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vitamins
and healthy fats,
moreover
many schoolgoers buy
such
bad quality
food
and they have problems with themselves.
On the other hand
, processed
food
can give more
time
. Everybody
know
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that shopping, planning meals and preparing
food
takes lots of
time
. In modern
life
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people
do not have that amount of
time
after their work to do meals.
For
instance
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in
Europe
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there is an increasing trend of ordering catering. Humans buy diet and get
next
day their
food
for a rest of the day.
Secondly
,
people
can buy calculated meals. In our century
people
have many
proplems
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problems
with health like diabetes, or overweight
people
. For someone who is on diet or who cut weight Do not
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waste
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waist
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waste
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time
on
prepering
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preparing
food
and calculating calories. Diabetes can buy
food
and see how much is
there
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sugar in
meal
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the meal
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.
For instance
, my dad has been overweight and found
company
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a company
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that
prepare
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food
for your own preference. He cut his weight in two months and become lean,
also
got in good healthy shape. In conclusion,
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convenience
convinience
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convenience
food
can cause problems, but it has
lot's
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lots
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of benefits like saving
time
and
cure
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disease
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. I think that I prove that merits outweigh demerits.
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