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Some people argued that distance learning is not as beneficial as traditional ways of education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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It is often argued that
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 education is not effective as traditional methods for learning.
This
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 essay will examine whether studying remotely or in-person learning is more beneficial and I strongly agree traditional ways are more useful.
First
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 off,
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 learning has different hurdles.
People
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's focus can be lost on anything since it is not a formal environment.
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 can talk with their family, have breakfast or maybe play online video games at the same time as courses.
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, to according a report in Denmark
last
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 year, students gained less knowledge and they did low scores from lessons in epidemic duration which was the peaked times for
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 learning. That's why having many distractors is not helpful for the educational system. Another reason why learning in a
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 is better is teacher's figure is more active. When all participants were in the classroom, a teacher could understand those who did not understand the topic easily or answer the questions in more detail.
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, traditional
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 is an effective way to have strong communication between teacher and student.
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,
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 can motivate each other and learn the topic deeply in a real
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,
this
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 situation is not the same for the online
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 since
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 have to close their cameras for some reason. Taking libraries as an example, many
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 go to libraries because they need to see other
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 working with them simultaneously. In conclusion, since there are many distractors and problems with studying remote, I strongly believe that a traditional learning system is more effective than
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 learning.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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