It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is significant for
children
to draw a distinction between right
and wrong when they are very young. To help them find out this
difference, disciplinary measures are required. I disagree with the necessity of punishment
for children
because we should try to demonstrate the result of their right
and wrong choices and their effects on their lives by stimulating their cognitive capacity. However
, in some cases
, punishment
might be required. In these situations, parents and teachers must avoid physical punishment
and inquire about other ways of punishment
.
Punishment
as a necessity might have a negative effect on children
's behaviour. Children
should be taught to make informed choices instead
of being punished. When they make their own decision, they learn to take the responsibility for their right
or wrong choices and experience their impressions on their whole life, while by
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punishment
the fear of doing such
activities might lead them not to be willing to gain more experiences in the life’s path and causes them to be isolated from the society or do things which are not suitable. For example
, when children
are playing games on a smartphone in their beds after midnight, it is better to talk to them about the harmful effects of playing such
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instead
of punishment
.
However
, punishment
might be required and could fit in some cases
. Since cognitive capacity for different age groups is different, children
might do something which is right
in their view, while it is wrong for that situation. In such
cases
, the punishment
could be useful, but the way children
are being punished is very important. Parents and teachers should avoid imposing physical punishment
because it negatively affects both the mental and physical well-being of children
. Instead
, making some restrictions and depriving them of certain privileges for a short period could be more useful to help children
to distinguish between good and bad things. For example
, parents could punish children
by creating some limitations to access their smartphones.
To conclude, I would argue that it is not necessary to punish children
to differentiate between right
and wrong, but in some cases
, a punishment
which does not negatively affect their health might be helpful.Submitted by samadmahoor on
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