It is important for people to take risks, both in theirprofessional lives and personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risksoutweigh the disadvantages?

In the modern world, taking
risks
is more important than doing nothing in the
carrier
lives
and personal
lives
. There are so many advantages
of
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taking
risks
and some disadvantages too. But in my point of view, it is more beneficial than
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detrimental
.
Firstly
, people take
risks
in their personal
lives
and
carrier
lives
and personal
lives
too.
for example
, they have to take decisions about subjects they prefer to learn in school, about their
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marriage
marrage
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marriage
and what kind of job they want to do in the
future
. The decision we make in the
first
case will
affects
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the
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future
carrier
.
However
, if someone
do
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not take
risk
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when taking decision
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definitely
they will not their
goles
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goals
in the
future
. And in the case of
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marriage
marrage
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marriage
, people have to choose only one to marry or they can stay single without taking
risks
.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages too. Not all the
risks
that
takes
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were
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help to
fulfill
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our
lives
. Sometimes it will take our
lives
to
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negative
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a negative
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direction
also
.
For example
, if we choose
a
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wrong subject to learn in school, it will affect
your
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our
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future
designation and
you
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we
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have to do a
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job
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job
that
you
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do not like to engage
.
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That will cause
a
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dissatisfaction
of
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the
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carrier
lives
. In conclusion, taking
risks
is important in professional and personal
lives
.
However
, there are advantages as well as disadvantages, I think these benefits of taking
risks
outweigh the
detriminals
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detrimental
.
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