Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effect on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are some negative results on children
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computers
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a daily row.
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with
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the disadvantages
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of using
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beyond
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advantages of bringing
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us.
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physical
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off, spending a lot of time on
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can give rise to a series of mental effects
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toddlers. Until they
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, it is conspicuous fact that personal
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help us to deal with many issues that human beings can not surpass.
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, if they not using under some restriction they can cause some psychological
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that children are insulted from their normal environments. I opine that the more using
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, the more unsocial life.
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Oxford University claims that for children, it is far more
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beneficial
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beneficial
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computers
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of the more substantial utensils in
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our modern life,
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they can be led to
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health
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if they
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frequently. Some ailments might be stemmed from using a computer. To exemplify,
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my schoolmate's
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is suffered from an eye disorder owing to
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a computer
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and more hours. He has played video games on his personal computer. To sum up,
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are stars in our technological era with overcoming many
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using them.
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, there are many
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concerning the usage of
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day-by-day
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day by day
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cyber safety
  • screen time
  • cognitive development
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • social isolation
  • digital literacy
  • interactive learning
  • virtual communication
  • physical well-being
  • academic performance
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