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In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. To what extent do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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Some
people
 believe importing
food
 from other countries is beneficial for their country's economic development and maintaining a stable
food
 price for citizens. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 idea. The advantages of importing products and goods outweigh the disadvantages.
To begin
 with, it is undeniable that there are more choices for citizens to choose their edible
foods
 when the government allows
people
 to get
foods
 from different countries.
For instance
,
people
 living in Europe can enjoy coconut and tropical fruits at home,
while
 Mid-Asian
people
 can buy fish in the supermarket. At the same time, importing
food
 from all over the world means that
people
 can have access to a lower price of a particular
food
 in some regions.
In contrast
,
people
 pay a lot to buy fruits and vegetables in Japan
due to
 the limitation of imported
foods
.
On the other hand
, the development of imports
also
 can promote the domestic economy through citizens' consumption.
In other words
, providing more products means that there are more possibilities to increase
people
's desires. If there is no
food
 commerce in the world, we might choose to plant
foods
 by ourselves or exchange
foods
 with our neighbours. Undoubtedly, the economy would not be prosperous if we all lived in
such
 conditions.
However
, there are still some shortcomings.,like domestic Farmers have more competition, they even need to sacrifice their benefits to occupy the market. In a nutshell,
although
 some shortcomings still exist, I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks because of the lower price of
food
 and the development of the social economy. .
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