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In the past people made better use of their free times than they do today. Do you agree or disagree with statement?

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 that in the past individuals made good
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 of their leisure
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 and spent something good for their health
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 of now people waste their month doing something bad. I agree with
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 notion, New youths prefer to
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 their free
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 to play online games I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with the agreement, The elderly made better
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 of their
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 doing physical activities
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 as doing yoga in the morning because it's good for their fitness and they feel so relaxed.
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, It has a secret for their wellness and they live long life
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 as above 80.
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, Nowadays many newcomers don't know what things will be doing in their leisure
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 of playing games.
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, In British old cities will be doing a great role in their society
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 they promote free health education and it has a good effect on their community.
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, In their free
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time
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 people will try to do something special for their wellness and it has increased the growth of their region. To commence with the disagreement, Today's modern world technology is advancing day by day and it has a good effect on their global economy and in the ,past they don't have
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 type of facilities
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 as gym clubs. To explain, When massive spent their free
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 now watching a movie
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 of doing
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meditation that's the reason obesity is rising for
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 habit but 50 years later individuals like to
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 their free age to spend with their families.
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, In Australian news channels reveal headlines now newcomers will not involve in physical exercise and it has a bad impact on their nation's upcoming generations.
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, Exercise will be good for health and so many benefits will attract people. In conclusion,
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 in the past will be enjoyed all kinds of activities human beings and they will
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 in future by their nation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integrity
  • trustworthiness
  • credibility
  • transparency
  • accuracy
  • deception
  • ethical dilemmas
  • universal
  • moral absolutes
  • compassionate
  • sincerity
  • untruths
  • social harmony
  • cultural norms
  • situational factors
  • dishonesty
  • personal gain
  • relationships
  • consequences
  • context
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