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Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. Do you agree or disagree?

#stores #food #products
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Supermarkets can seen be in every
country
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 with more foreign
products
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 rather than local ones.
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 is because they can make extra money from imported
food
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 items.
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, I partly agree with
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 notion due to the plethora of benefits of both international and locally produced
products
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. On the one hand,
food
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products
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 harvested locally can contribute to the economy of the
country
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 in many ways.
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, companies have to pay the import tax on
products
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 they are buying from another
country
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 and
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 tax can be saved by selling locally-made items.
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, a majority of companies buy some goods at a cheaper rate from other countries,
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, they can make a profit from those
products
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 as well as because international
food
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products
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 are less expensive so there is more probability of an increase in the sell.
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, foreign
products
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 are
also
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 an excellent idea to surge in selling
products
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. The reason is, several people believe in the
products
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 that come with the brand and are demanding in the market.
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, Nanak company, which is very popular in India and they export these
food
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products
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 to Canada.
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,
this
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 export is not only beneficial for Canada but it is
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 profiting the companies who are selling the same
products
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 in Canada. Despite making a profit internationally,
this
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 company is providing employment all over the world. In conclusion,
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 countries should promote the
products
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 made in their home
country
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, encouraging people toward buying
products
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 made in other nations can save the manufacturing cost as well as labour.
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