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Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. Do you agree or disagree?

#stores #food #products
Supermarkets can seen be in every
country
 with more foreign
products
 rather than local ones.
This
 is because they can make extra money from imported
food
 items.
However
, I partly agree with
this
 notion due to the plethora of benefits of both international and locally produced
products
. On the one hand,
food
products
 harvested locally can contribute to the economy of the
country
 in many ways.
Firstly
, companies have to pay the import tax on
products
 they are buying from another
country
 and
this
 tax can be saved by selling locally-made items.
Secondly
, a majority of companies buy some goods at a cheaper rate from other countries,
therefore
, they can make a profit from those
products
 as well as because international
food
products
 are less expensive so there is more probability of an increase in the sell.
On the other hand
, foreign
products
 are
also
 an excellent idea to surge in selling
products
. The reason is, several people believe in the
products
 that come with the brand and are demanding in the market.
For example
, Nanak company, which is very popular in India and they export these
food
products
 to Canada.
Hence
,
this
 export is not only beneficial for Canada but it is
also
 profiting the companies who are selling the same
products
 in Canada. Despite making a profit internationally,
this
 company is providing employment all over the world. In conclusion,
although
 countries should promote the
products
 made in their home
country
, encouraging people toward buying
products
 made in other nations can save the manufacturing cost as well as labour.
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