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You are planning for a vacation and want your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: tell him/her why you want to take a vacation describe your plan invite him/her to go with you.

#vacation #friend #plan
Dear James, I hope
this
 letter finds you well! It's been a
while
 since we
last
 caught up, and I just wanted to drop you a quick note to see how things are going. I finished my project and got my salary perfectly, so I want to go on a trip for one week and I am alone,
moreover
 sending the letter to you. Anyway, my plan is great ideas
such
 as travelling to France , especially Paris going to nightclubs, going to shore and swimming. I will try payment for all the costs of
this
 trip like the reserved hotel, the cost of food and other shopping. I want to invite you for a vacation, James what are doing? James, please accept my request why in the past very good with you. Just wanted to say hi and see how you're doing. Can't wait to hear from you soon. best wishes, Mohsen
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advice
Try to improve the logical flow of your ideas. For instance, start with why you want a vacation, then describe your plan, and finally invite your friend to join you.
advice
Use each paragraph to focus on a single idea for better coherence and cohesion.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and invitational, which suits the purpose of the letter.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately structured, making the letter personal and polite.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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