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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that badly-behaved
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 in schools have detrimental effects on good-quality
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. Poor
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students
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 who are rude and impolite are taught in combination with separate. Personally, I agree completely with
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 statement. In the essay, I will give some reasons for that. On the one hand, Poor
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students
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 often spoilt. They're allowed to have whatever they want, regardless of price and behave as they please.
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 means that badly-behaved
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 grow up without consideration for others and without any understanding of where their standard of living comes from. As well as, poor
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students
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 often lie with family members, even if
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. They raised consideration of others and to be social and responsible for individuals as well as poor
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students
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 should focus on their studies and be protected from bullying and threats.
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, badly-behaved
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 get to
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 age, they have not learnt any self-control or discipline. They have less respect for their teachers and often tend to ignore
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 rules in the way that their
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 did. To be more precise, children learn a good attitude from their
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 at home.
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, teachers habitually complain about bullying at
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 among
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. Perhaps,
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 who have immorality and disobedient character are taught individually since well-behaved
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 apply other
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' performance.
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, According to, an article published in The New York Times the survey of poor management
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 is the result of families which have working
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 who don't have time for bringing up their children. In conclusion, I would argue that
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 who have poor attitudes should be taught individually because they often tend to ignore
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 rules. Badly-behaved
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 should be punished slightly for bullying and involved in compulsory work
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 as cleaning the classroom and detention.
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, they do not do more bullying and do not interrupt other
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