In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. What is your opinion about this?
There is
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forbidden
children
in some places
of US
to visit alone. There Correct article usage
the US
is
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are
which
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in which
kids
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unless they are with adults. In Correct pronoun usage
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we will discuss Add a comma
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this
topic and I will also
share my opinion.
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, There
are some restricted Fix capitalization
there
places
for kids
in US
because there are many different Correct article usage
the US
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activities
activites
and things Correct your spelling
activities
happen
in different Wrong verb form
happening
places
so it is not allowed teenagers
to enter all areas, some Change preposition
for teenagers
places
are below 18 to visit for
example, clubs, dance parties, bar etc. Add the comma(s)
,for
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the good
children
that
if Correct word choice
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kids
want to go there they should go with any
adult may it be Correct determiner usage
an
her
uncle, father, mother etc . I agree with Correct pronoun usage
their
this
decision.
On the other hand
, if we see kids
are bounted
not to visit in all Correct your spelling
bounded
bound
places
at night. In society, these rules bring good
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a good
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environment
enivironment
for teenagers, Correct your spelling
environment
kids
know that they have to follow some rules and there is
some Change the verb form
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boundaries
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it
should not be crossed Correct pronoun usage
apply
otherwise
action will take against this
. For example
, if there is
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are
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no
not
limits and Correct your spelling
no
children
can do whatever they want, they can't feel the difference what
is good for them Change preposition
between what
in
Change preposition
at
this
age and what is not because they don't have limits. so in all circumstances
we should not give all freedom. we should Add a comma
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taught
them there is Change the verb form
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be taught
limitation
at Add an article
a limitation
this
age.
In conclusion, I agree with this
curfew for kids
because this
is for betterment
of Add an article
the betterment
community
that we are living and our Add an article
the community
children
are growing there. at
the Change preposition
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end
the Add a comma
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kids
know that there are some things and areas to explore when they will grow up.Submitted by Faisal on
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