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Popular events like the Football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tension and safely releasing patriotic emotions.

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The whole
world
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 stops
to watch
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 international sporting
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 as the Olympics every four years. The athletes participating put their best performance on display. Sporting
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 as the Football
World
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 Cup and the Olympics have helped ease international tension,
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 as when powerful leaders were trying to control the
world
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’s economy. The Olympic Games are a great example that highlights how sporting
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 can bring nations together, at least temporarily. Ancient History saw Greeks and Romans interrupting battles to participate in the games. Even now, athletes from Palestine and Israel forget their differences, compete peacefully and even embrace each other after an event.
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, these popular
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 can bring
world
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 attention to the terrible consequences of wars, putting pressure on leaders to try and reach agreements to end disputes.
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, international sporting
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 have offered benefits in some Global South nations which live in constant internal civil war.
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, Brazil suffers a high unemployment rate, hunger, crime, lack of education, poverty, and corruption.
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 can be embarrassing and lead to low self-esteem.
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, during the Football
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 Cup festivities, the Brazilian squad, easily considered the best team in the
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, invokes an amazing feeling of pride in their country’s people. Most individuals put aside their problems and worries, and even criminal activity decreases. Roads are painted in the national colours, people wear the Brazilian team shirts and buy national flags. In conclusion, popular sporting
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 play a decisive role in diminishing international tensions and invoking patriotic feelings

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