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As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. In your opinion, what are the causes and what are the effects on society.

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Earlier
people
 used to live together in large
families
, whereas
this
 has changed recently due to globalization. Nowadays
people
 prefer to live in nuclear
families
 and away from immediate relatives. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why
people
 like to live on their own and what are the effects of it.
To begin
 with, many multinational companies have their head offices in metropolitan cities.
This
 attracts
people
 from
countryside
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 to migrate to the nearest city to earn money. As the cost of living in cities is high it becomes hard for the whole family to move, so only some family members migrate.
For example
, in India
people
 migrate to bigger cities like Mumbai and Delhi to get more job opportunities and tend to send some part of their earnings back home every month to support their extended family.
Hence
,
this
 starts the process of
the
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partition where a big family is broken into smaller
families
 to find employment. To continue
further
, the formation of nuclear
families
 is in trend nowadays and can be observed in all parts of the world. There are many problems associated with
this
.
Firstly
, children who live and grow up in
this
 type of nuclear family develop the tendency of being on their own as they don'
t
 have any siblings to play with. They don'
t
 like sharing their toys and get used to all the love and attention of their
parents
. To exemplify,
kids
 who stay on their own the whole day while their
parents
 are busy working tend to develop more mental illnesses than other
kids
.
Moreover
, unsupervised
kids
 tend to lie to their
parents
 and don'
t
 have
the
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 affectionate bond between them because
parents
 are unavailable most of the time when the
kids
 were growing up.
Secondly
,
people
 who migrate to different states lose touch with their cultural values as they don'
t
 spend time getting involved in the community but
instead
 work extra hours to earn more money.
Therefore
, not only
this
 makes them lose touch with their traditions but
also
 takes away from their family rituals.
Lastly
, in my opinion, it would be wise to say that governments should try and create more job opportunities in
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 rural part of the country so that
people
 stay with their
families
 and don'
t
 need to leave their houses for a better standard of living.
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