In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays a lot of
countries
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have good advances in agricultural sphere. But inspite
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, big amount of
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all over the world don't get enough level of
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. They go hungry, and it is a big
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of our civilization. In
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essay will be examined the reasons why it is so, and ways to solve
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problem
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. In my opinion, the case of being some part of our humanity hungry causes by present politics and level of developing of each
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. We know that many
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of African continentn have to survive, because they have not good economics, and budgets. At these
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many
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can not find a job, and have to work hard to buy some
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, or to produce it. Another reason is the climate: if it is too hot, and almost no rains, it it hard to improve agriculture and grow fruits, vegetables and seeds in
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country
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. Thats why
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is not enough: Goverments have no money to improve agriculture and to advance another different parts of incomes,
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as tourism, making goods on factories, import them - the citizens of that
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have to stay hungry. I think that to solve
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we have two ways. On the
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hand, developed
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, like USA. Canada, Australia and European
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should write a programme for improving poor states of Africa and another poor
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and help them to by finance, or by sending there good specialists. Another way is to lose independence of that
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and becoming a part of developed states like Japan, South Korea and Singapore or China. I think the
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could make any poor
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to become a developed
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.
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, the second way of solving the
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is to migrate a half part of
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of African
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to a developed state, and may be
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and products should be enough for the rest half. In conclusion, there are a lot of different problems in the world. And we examined
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of them at
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essay. In spite of advances in developed
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, we still have hungry
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, who can not find
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and some of them even die. It is awful situation, and I hope that Governments of leader states should try to solve it in nearest 10 years.
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Task Achievement: The essay does not fully address the task. It focuses on the problems but lacks a thorough exploration of the reasons and solutions for the issue of hunger. It is important to address all aspects of the prompt in a balanced manner.
coherence cohesion
Coherence & Cohesion: The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, it lacks coherence and cohesion due to repetitive and unclear ideas. It needs to use cohesive devices to connect ideas and avoid repetition for better coherence.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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