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Stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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It is becoming ubiquitous that
people
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 are suffering from illnesses
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 of
stress
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.
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essay
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 will discuss the main causes of
stress
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-related illnesses including longer working hours and poor
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work
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-life balance.
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, solutions will be suggested in
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essay
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 including prioritizing
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 and keeping regular exercise. Working overtime these days has become a subtle company culture.
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,
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work
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-life balance is never achieved.
People
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 sacrifice quality time with their family and leisure activities to advance more in the company because of the economic downturn and unstable job market.
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, many large well-known companies around the world have reduced in force especially during and after the pandemic. As a consequence, mental and physical health is impacted by the high-pressure
people
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 are experiencing from working overtime and having no
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work
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-life balance. Prioritizing
work
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 and staying active are both imperative to mitigate anxiety and
stress
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. They could help better manage time and tasks, release more time to have a life, and cycle back to
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 in a more productive mode.
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, more often than not,
people
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 burn out from working too much on urgent but not important tasks or piling others’ priorities on top of their own
work
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, which is quite unnecessary.
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,
work
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 prioritization and staying active are very practical approaches, in order to
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work
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-related
stress
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, especially needless ones. To sum up, it is observed that an increasing number of
people
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 nowadays are suffering illnesses caused by
stress
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.
This
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essay
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 pointed out the two main causes which are long working hours and
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work
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-life imbalance.
This
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also
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 suggested that the solutions to
this
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 problem are twofold: to better prioritize
work
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 and keep regular exercise.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stress-related illnesses
  • hypertension
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • modern lifestyle
  • work pressure
  • technological advancements
  • social pressures
  • material wealth
  • work-life balance
  • mindfulness
  • meditation
  • stress management
  • flexible working hours
  • telecommuting
  • mandatory vacation
  • educational programs
  • mental health
  • supportive work environment
  • counseling services
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