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Some people say that social media is a digital drug that has left many people addicted enhanced their lots of valuable time while others say social media has Enable Connectivity with the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion on the topic.

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The
world
 is evolving tremendously, social publishing has now conquered the digital
world
. In the following ,paragraphs I am going to explain certain views about social
media
. Social
media
 is a digital drug that has left many people addicted and enhanced their valuable time,in the sense that everyone is now glued to social
media
 both young and old folks. Families are now lacking social interactions with the members of the family because everyone is busy on the
media
 platform checking what is happening on earth. Our society is now losing moral values each and every day because of the information that the crowd is obtaining from social
media
 .Bloggers are posting anything that can give them a huge fan following on social
media
platforms
 like Instagram,Facebook and TikTok some of the content is reducing our moral values.Young children are now neglecting their studies spending more hours on social
platforms
 that do not contribute anything to their academic studies.
On the other hand
,social
media
 is connecting families and friends around the
world
, people can now learn about different cultures through digital
platforms
.We can now access information all over the
world
 on social
media
, for ,instance we can now access IELTS programs on social
media
 and children can do school projects and homework by accessing the information on the
media
platforms
. In my ,opinion social news is amazing , with a good amount of time management it becomes unaddictive and very useful to mankind. A limited amount of time should be given to children on the network in order for them to have physical and social interaction with friends and family members.
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