Some people think that the increase in international travel has a negative impact on the environment and should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays travelling abroad has become increasingly popular among people.

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argue that regulations should be implemented in order to reduce

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travel because the growing tendency of international trips will lead to environmental

damages

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. I totally agree with

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idea.

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with, travelling to

other country

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another country

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, including international transportation and the

carbon

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footprint in the

traveling

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travelling

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country, would affect the

environment

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negatively.

First,

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travel by air leads to the accumulation of harmful exhaust fumes from

airplanes

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aeroplanes

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.

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fumes,

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a high proportion of

carbon

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dioxide, will undoubtedly exacerbate the hothouse effect, which will result in extreme weather conditions.

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the

carbon

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footprint of the accumulations of travelers is another major concern

regard

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to

environment

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. In fact, after arriving at the destination, travelers tend to purchase many local products and in

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producing

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many

carbon

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-based wastes

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as plastic bags or packages.

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that

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fact that they would

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take taxis or other in-city transportation which will

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lead to exhausted fume emission and raise the level of

carbon

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dioxide in the atmosphere. All of these factors are not

environmental-friendly

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environmentally friendly

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.

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advocate that authorities should take

actions

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to control the prevalence of international

traveling

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travelling

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. Nowadays, it is getting increasingly easier for people to visit other countries, as the flight price is cheaper and the procedures for crossing abroad

are become

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simpler.

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trend contributes to the increasing number of international travelers, and in

turn

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would lead to the acceleration of

environmental

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the environmental

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effects mentioned above.

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, the government should take

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responsibility for protecting the

environment

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by introducing some regulations

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as taxing

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international flights or shipping. In

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way, the pollution made by international trips would be considerably reduced. in conclusion, visiting other countries will more or less impair the

environment

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.

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, it is totally necessary and reasonable for the government to restrict

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trend in order to make our world better.