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You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter: Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need Explain how you will keep up-to-date while you are away Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Mr Ryan, I am writing
this
 letter to seek permission to take leave from work
due to
 an unavoidable family event. I am taking
this
 leave for almost one month as I am going out of town to attend a court session. It is a long overdue property dispute between my family and my uncle’s family. As per the court law, it is mandatory to be present there for every session which might continue for over three weeks. As I will be away, my
assistance
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 will keep me updated
for
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on
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 every work. She has all my emergency contact information to keep in touch with me. She will email me
everyday
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 with the development of any official business. I can assure you that I will cover any work that I miss
while
 I am away as I will have complete remote access to my computer in the office.
Moreover
, when I am back, I will do some overtime to solve any unresolved issues that might arise during my absence. I hope you
would
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 be kind enough to understand my situation and grant
my
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leave
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 of absence for one month. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Salahuddin
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coherence cohesion
Improve logical structure with more connectors to enhance flow.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each idea is distinctly separated into paragraphs.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task: reason for the leave, duration, how to keep updated, and work coverage.
task achievement
A polite and respectful tone is maintained throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Clear opening and closing statements demonstrate good organization in greeting and farewell.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leave of absence
  • personal reasons
  • length of leave
  • commitment
  • plan to stay updated
  • virtual meetings
  • responsibilities
  • delegating tasks
  • temporary replacement
  • training sessions
  • ongoing work projects
  • assure
  • duties
  • colleague
  • in your absence
  • respectful closing remark
  • discuss the matter in more detail
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