Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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a whole, from education to the shopping sector it has conquered every corner.
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of the
people
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world
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the world
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today
states
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, that
technology
has changed buying goods
in
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an easy way, whereas the other half of mankind
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with the
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statement.
However
in my opinion
today
internet
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the internet
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has changed the retail and shopping industry to a vast area and
this
is a positive impact
for
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the
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people
. The
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essay will point out both of the views and my opinion.
To begin
with, there are
plethora
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of advantages of innovative
technology
that we are using in our daily life.
Firstly
, one of these advantages begins with online shopping, which is convenient and reliable
to
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busy
beas
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bees
who are struggling
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their work-life and home activities.
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,
this
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emerging methods
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lots of energy of
people
, where in the past our parents had to keep a separate day for shopping
all
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the groceries, but with the technological development around us
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few
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clicks our online shopping cart can be filled and the items are delivered to our doorstep. Another factor that most
of
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the
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people
agree with the latest shopping
technology
is convenience, internet shopping never has a closing or opening hours like
as
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in store
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shopping,
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whenever
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when ever
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whenever
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you want and where ever you are around the country you can order through different social platforms. As an example I live in Australia, due to the pandemic situations my parents are facing
today
, they are unable to shop
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in store
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and they are not familiar with the internet, so I order
them
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grocery
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groceries
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through a Sir Lankan online store, which saves their time and my time as well.
On the other hand
, the other half of
people
who disagree with modern
technology
which has affected
the
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shopping is that
,
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today
people
are not socially interacting with each other, as an
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our parents used to have a vast connection with
people
around the village, town because they were interacting
people
and they meet each other once a week while
their
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are shopping. Furthermost they get enough
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to
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their body during
instore
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in-store
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shopping, where they walk miles and miles selecting different vegetables and fruits etc. Since
today
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generation is not
a
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part of shopping in stores, they have faced a lot of deceases
such
as high blood pressure and obesity. To sum up, in my
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online shopping using
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internet
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interent
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Internet
is a
life saving
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option that
people
are using nowadays
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since the world is running towards money and every item in the market is
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skyrocketing
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sky rocketing
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,
people
need to work and earn to live. So leaving a particular day or few hours for shopping in the market is waste of time as well
and
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energy, these two options can be used to earn a sum and
by
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buy
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items
through
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online.
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  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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